Sebastian Alexander White

[Sebastian White]

{SEBASTIAN ALEXANDER WHITE}

Name: {Sebastian Alexander White}
Nicknames: {Bastian or Seb (Sebby to closer friends)}
Age: {17}
Occupation: {Bookstore Owner}

Eye color: {Bright Blue}
Hair color: {Dark Brown}
Playby: {Nicholas Hoult}
Canon/Original: {Original!}
Powers: {Yes indeed!}
{1} {Sebastian is able to cause his mind to completely go overload and cause his brain to work overtime, making his body faster, stronger, and look altogether mad.}
{2}
{Sebastian is able to create and ensue chaos upon a group or individual. While he can easily create and control the chaos, the problem is stopping the chaos. Once it ensues, it's extremely hard for him to stop it.}
{3}
{In the spirit of his schizophrenia, Sebastian is able to mirror his body and project images of himself. These images can act just as he does and fight along side him. }
Parents: {Donavan James White} {Lucille Coraline White nee Green}
Siblings: {None}
Children: {None}
Other: {Cobalt, his Miniature Husky who is Sebastian's closest friend}

Likes:

[/b][/color]Reading and Books : He runs a bookstore, what'd you expect?}
{Tea: He always brews it from his own herbs, never from a bag}
{Dogs: His puppy Cobalt is his best friend}
{Music: Seb is an expert on the violin, piano and trumpet, and loves all forms of music}
{Hats: He has an odd love of hats, and his hobby is making them}
{Food: Any type of food, he'll eat it. Not picky to be honest.}
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Dislikes:

{Cats: He's allergic to them and just finds that they are douches}
{Coffee: He will literally vomit at the smell of coffee, he hates it so much}
{Taxies: You just can't trust them with all of that yellow. It's like they're trying to look happy...}
{Mathematics: He finds it boring and often falls asleep if someone speaks to him about it. He did in high school.}
{Chandeliers: One snap of that chain and, bam, you've been impaled.}[/ul]

Strengths:

{When in Insanity, Sebastian doesn't feel much pain. He still can, it's just dulled down.}
{Sebastian is pretty strong even when not in Insanity. He does work out. It's just a thing he always does naturally.}
{His intelligence is an extreme asset towards him. It's the basis to his insanity. The more he learns, sometimes the more he can go into Insanity.}[/ul]

Weaknesses:

{Due to a apart of his mental breakdowns, Sebastian is schizophrenic. He can often have a hard time figuring out what is real and what isn't.}
{Sebastian is, and always will be, very socially awkward. He is very awkward around crushes, and is always extremely nice to people that he wants to e his friends. This can be seen extremely odd by sane people, but is a kind gesture from Seb's point of view.}
{Sebastian doesn't do wel with authority. One of the major reasons in school he'd get detentions was because he'd yell back at his teacher if they yelled at him. He'd rebel very quickly if the teacher/staff set him off.}[/ul]
Personality: {Sebastian could be classified as that friend that's crazy and wild. While he'll take everyone out to see good movies or other things like that, the second he sees you need help, he becomes the therapist and helps you with anything. He has asked some of his friends if they wanted him to kill the person they were mad at. Sebastian is still kind to people, even though others might just see him as a loony.

Sebastian loves to be alone, so he can just think through his mind and get everything in order that he needs to get in order. Reading is also something he does a lot. Sometimes reality can be cruel, but in books... magic can happen. Along with reading, Sebastian is a writer himself and uses an old typewriter to write. Rather old-fashioned, yes, but it calms him down to hear the clicking of the keys and the loud zip of the paper holder as he slides to a new line. This is one of the few times he can be seen sitting and focusing on one task. Writing, reading, playing an instrument, and working on new hats.

That is another thing that is rather odd about Sebastian. He doesn't have a normal hobby like most guy teens, no. Sebastian White makes hats from scratch. He does everything. Stitches the silk, embroiders everything by hand, even adds flares like feathers or beads if he wants. While not all are sold, the ones that are, are sold extremely fast. But since it's just a hobby, he sells the hats for the same as a normal hat on retail.

Sebastian is also a pretty good cook. Course, you'll sometimes see him throw the entire salt shaker into a pot of stew, but it's a fun surprise if you find it! If a new shop opens on his street, Seb will bake up something and personally give it to them, happily greeting them and welcoming them to the street.

If he insults a person, he doesn't mean to. If he does, it's just a way he tries to make friends.

While he runs a bookstore and has superpowers, he's still only 17. Sebastian can sometimes act younger than he is. Like when he sleeps: Sebastian cannot sleep without his plushies. He has a lot of stuffed animals, with a lot of different colors, shapes, ages, and names. His oldest animal is a penguin named Jordie. Sebastian has had Jordie since he was born, making him the closest to him of all of the plushies.

One more thing to say about Sebastian. He is very very good with a gun. While he doesn't like to admit it, he always keeps a pistol in his boot. Always.}

History: {Since he was born, Sebastian was a rather timid child. His mother left his father once he was born. His mother had birthed him, then left the hospital, leaving Donovan with Sebastian. So Seb lived with his father for a majority of his childhood. He was rather small and thin during this time, whereas his father was very tall and muscular. Sebastian looked up to his father figuratively and literally. While Sebastian was only 5' at the age of nine and his father was 6' 9", he always worried that he wouldn't grow. But Donovan reassured him that he would grow big and strong just as he was.

Donovan White worked as a construction worker, so they did not have much of an income, but the two males lived happily anyways. Sebastian found that he had a liking for books at the age of three. He would read and read, reading everything in the house by three and a half. Every Christmas Donovan would get his son a small stack of books, to which Sebastian would hug his father for ten minutes since he loved getting books more than anything.

When Sebastian was 8 and in the 2nd grade, he had a traumatic experience due to his guidance counselor. Since he had gone to school, he and other people knew he was a bit odd, so he would have talks with the counselor just to have someone to talk to.

No one knew that by the fourth week, when Sebastian had felt comfort with the counselor, that trust was extremely broken. The older man eventually got to a little close to the second grader and Sebastian began to get really really really really uncomfortable. And then things happened that the boy didn't want to happen. In the end, he began to thrash about as he counselor grabbed him from his small height and he screamed, grabbing a pen from the desk and drove it right into the counselor's eye. This rammed the brass tip into his brain, piercing his frontal lobe and causing blood to pool, killing him in seconds.

Donovan White felt as if he had failed as a father. He wasn't able to protect his son, and he got a bit depressed, but the only thing that kept him going was the smile on Sebastian's face when he would pick his son up from school. }

RP Sample: {Sebastian laughed. "Madame D'Quell you're so funny!" he said to the empty chair to the right of him, "More tea?" The boy got up and stood on the table, walking over to the many teapots on resting on the white cloth. Picking up a silver teapot, Sebastian giggled and walked over to the empty seat, pouring more tea into the brimming cup. "Cream and sugar?" he asked, grabbing a handful of sugar cubes and hurling them at the seat, the cubes shattering on the wood.

"Oh! Oh! I think we should have a dance!!" the boy said, pulling out his phone and playing a waltz song. Still standing on the table, Seb began to waltz with an invisible person. His feet hit pots and cups, saucers and creamers, shattering some and knocking over others. He didn't mind. They could be replaced. When the song ended the seventeen year old looked to a stuffed bear that was sitting in a rocking chair to his left, "Why, Reginald! You are not very talkative today are you!? Why is that?!" The bear stayed silent. Or so it seemed to people other than Sebastian," Ahahaha!! You're so right! Shopping for groceries is quite the experience!" He giggled again and sat back in his seat, putting his top hat back on.

Looking across the long table, most would see a normal blue stuffed bunny, but Sebastian saw something otherwise. "Harvey! You've barely touched your tea. It'll get cold." He picked up a saucer, "Drink it before it gets cold Harvey!" he screamed. "HARVEY!!!" he screamed, and hurled the saucer at the rabbit, missing it and smashing against the wall. Sebastian breathed, "I'm sorry. I didn't mean to lose my cool..." he smiled and looked at the empty chair next to Harvey. "Miss Drake, did I ask you if you wanted another cookie?" He got back up on the table and laughed hysterically, setting a cookie on the Miss Drake's saucer, "There you go! A tea party's not complete without cookiiiiiiiieeeeeessss!!!" Sebastian skipped back across the table.}


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Your name: {Hexx}
Random Fact about you: {Silence and I are friends from school. I was the first to introduce her to The Mortal Instruments and to the Virals series.}
Custom Title for Character: {It's funny. People crave a magical solution for everything, but they refuse to believe in magic.}


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[Pirate Queen Crow]

PENDING!

Yo, I'm really pleased you decided to join, and I'm really happy for you to have finished your app, but we gotta put you as pending for the following reasons:

OCCUPATION
He's seventeen and owns/runs a bookstore? He should still be in high school unless he's been kicked out or is being home schooled, in which case he wouldn't have time to run a bookstore. (I have read your history and it doesn't explain this.)


POWERS
I have a couple issues with this section, so I'm going to break it down a little bit to make it easier to keep track of.

Insanity
Insanity is not a power. What you're talking about here is mental and physical overload. Insanity is either:
1) Doing something over and over again and expecting a different result - Albert Einstein
2) The inability to understand right from wrong (only once at an age whereas you should know right from wrong) - This is the psychiatric definition and why you can plead not guilty by reason of mental fault or defect in court if there is a chance you didn't know what you were doing or didn't know it was wrong
3) The state of being seriously mentally ill; madness - links with the above
4) Extreme foolishness or irrationality

It is not overloading of the mind or of the body. Sorry.

Top hat and umbrella
Very Penguin...
These aren't powers. They're paraphernalia. Paraphernalia, in case you aren't familiar with it, is any form of apparatus, equipment or furnishing used for a particular activity. For example, The Dark Knight!Joker's paraphernalia consists of knives, dynamite, gunpowder and gasoline... And bombs. Lots and lots of bombs.


CHILDREN
That's not an acceptable answer to that section. Seventeen year olds can have children. I've known of twelve year olds having children or at the very least getting pregnant by thirteen year olds. There was a story I heard a few years ago in England, which was of a teenager getting pregnant and having the baby and getting a paternity test because there was a chance a thirteen year old boy could have been the father. Seventeen year olds are more than capable of ending up with children, is my point.

Gay men are also able to create life. Admittedly, they can't give birth but they still produce sperm which goes half-way to creating a fetus. Next step is finding someone with the egg cells who is willing to sleep with them at least once.

The only exception to both of these are if he doesn't produce sperm or has never had sexual intercourse with someone with egg cells or has worn a condom.

Also, he's seventeen and can't possibly have children but he can run a bookshop? ... I'm just going to leave this here.


DISLIKES - Chandeliers
Very few chandeliers would impale you. More likely to crush to be honest... Just a small note there.


STRENGTHS
Is he not able to run? Also you don't have to mention the overload power in every one. You could just say 'Sebastian is generally strong and in shape through working out' and it would be fine. Don't really need the comment about the 'crazy people'. They're people too, we get that. We're all mad here, after all.


WEAKNESSES
You don't note anywhere what, exactly, his insanity is besides overloading ability. Does he have a specific disorder or illness or is he just generally insane (using the definitions up there somewhere ^)? I will just say here that he seems to have a delusion of some kind, though I could be wrong.

Number two strongly irritates me. Being socially awkward doesn't mean he gets pushed away. Being socially awkward means that he's not good at communicating with strangers or that he feels awkward in social situations. It doesn't mean others push you away. You've kind of blurred into personality here, too.

I'm not sure how number three is a weakness, if I'm honest... Wariness, as far as I can see, is a pretty good idea most of the time. Caution, it's usually called. Being overly cautious can, admittedly, be a weakness, though I'm not sure how you can be outrageous and cautious because they're usually completely contradictory.


PERSONALITY

Sebastian is a fun and insane kid.

... How? How is he fun? How is he insane? You state things a lot without backing it up with anything else.

I have to ask as to why the next bit isn't in the 'likes' list. Just because what you like isn't the same as your personality. (by the way, I'm pretty sure it isn't normal to obsess over YouTube. Watch videos on it? Totally normal. Obsess over it? Not really that normal. This seems like nitpicking but I'm just confused as to how that's 'normal'...)

We need more personality in there. You said before, in the weaknesses, that he's outrageous. That's a personality trait. Short tempered is also a personality trait. Just in case you need it, there's a resource thread here for personality traits. I've had to use it a number of times for requesting OCs and doing applications. Very useful. You can also just Google positive/negative personality traits and really good stuff will turn up.


HISTORY

made of an accident

I think you mean 'made because of an accident' or 'born as an accident' or 'born as product of an accident'?

I don't understand how his parents being a minister and a prayer woman mean anything. Anyone can abuse their children for reading material or any other reason. A minister and prayer woman can also disagree with reading material or whatever without beating and freezing their child. It just seems like you're trying to link those things together and it doesn't make much sense to me.

The more and more his parents tortured him, the more and more he became insane

Suggested better wording here: The more his parents tortured him, the more insane he became.

Using 'more and more' more than once is a little bit repetitive in my opinion, but it's just a suggestion. The 'more he became insane' definitely isn't the right wording there, though. 'more insane he became' is.

You don't tell us anything else about his life. Did he not have any friends? School life? Did he actively try to hide any signs of his parents' abuse towards him? Did he actively try to get help and was ignored? I know that sounds mean, but it's happened. The amount of children (I'm talking younger than ten years old) that have died in the UK because the social services didn't do anything or paid a couple of visits and said 'everything's fine!' is terrible.

By 9th grade he had no need for school, so he stopped going.

I know for a fact that if you just stop going one day, the school do check up on you. I was off for a week when I was twelve due to my nan dying and they threatened to send the social services round even though we explained what was going on and why I was off. School staff are stupid, yes, but they don't just not notice a kid not going to school.

sinking his 14 year old teeth into his neck. The son fell off of his father, laughing as he fell and bled out.

It takes a fair bit of power to break the skin and the blood vessels in the neck. Unless you're biting down exceedingly hard, it isn't going to happen. You need a fair bit of power to just stab someone in the neck, which is why people usually swing their arm or basically don't just push into the skin or apply pressure unless trying to torture someone. Teeth aren't as sharp as, say, a knife or a pen nib and they take a bit of effort to get through the skin. It's unlikely you'd draw enough blood to make someone bleed out if you did manage to draw any blood at all from biting.

An adult male contains roughly five litres of blood. A bite mark would not remain bleeding for long enough for the victim to lose five litres of blood. Even stabbing doesn't always cause that much blood loss and deaths can occur from internal bleeding or, more likely, infection. A bite mark would clot after a number of drops and/or minutes.

Doing something in self-defence requires an attacker. They weren't attacking and therefore would not count as self-defence. If it did count, then he wouldn't go to an asylum or mental hospital for that. He would plead not guilty by reason self-defence. If he was found not guilty by reason of self-defence, then he would be let free to go amongst the rest of society. Being a minor also doesn't mean you go to an asylum or mental hospital. Note: most places now are mental hospitals, not asylums. The exception to this is, obviously, Arkham Asylum.

Being a minor means you get tried... Well... As a minor. You go to a mental hospital if you have a mental illness or disorder, in which case you'd plea not guilty by reason of mental fault or defect - if found not guilty you likely get to decide whether you go to a mental hospital/psychiatric ward or not, but I'm not sure about that. It might be that you get a court order to go to psychiatric ward or mental hospital. You may also choose to make a plea bargain including time in a mental hospital or psychiatric ward until you're no longer a danger to yourself or others. That may take a number of years though at the age of eighteen, I believe, they absolutely have to let you go if you've been tried as a minor because you're then an adult. Again, I'm not absolutely certain about that. It would be better to Google it than take my word on it.

Also, we need more history. I know he's seventeen but you've skipped over the entirety of his childhood - including school years except to tell us that he's extremely intelligent - and thus we have no idea about whether he's changed over the years, if so then what's caused that change besides the abuse he's suffered. Was he bullied? Did he have a lot of friends? Was he quiet? Imagine you can see into his head and see all of his memories and you have to describe them vaguely or that you're writing a vague biography for him. Of course, it's fine to miss out a couple of years at various points because it can be difficult to think of things sometimes, but not whole sections of his life.



Small note here: He is obviously very much based on the Mad Hatter. This is something myself and Silence both noticed. There is already a Batverse character based on the Mad Hatter (Jarvis Tetch) which I told you about. We would prefer if he was a little bit more original. Of course, being influence by the Mad Hatter is one thing. The character being influenced by Lewis Carroll's Hatter (he's never called the Mad Hatter in the book) is absolutely fine, though still exceedingly close to Jarvis Tetch which I'm a bit iffy about... I'd suggest picking one thing for him to obsess over in order for him to be less like the Hatter and more like Sebastian White - Original Character, though you don't have to do this.


This was a bit long, for which I'm a little bit sorry. Once you're finished editing, tell either myself or Silence or both of us and one of us will get back to you and hopefully accept. Thank you for joining Heroes Arise.

- Crow.